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what's a good theme for a short story?
I'm not sure if these are good themes, or if you can actually call them themes.
-real friends stick with you
-be yourself
an extra question: Is this a good idea?
i just started writing about a vampire girl who ends up going to school at night. and something like one of her friends betrays her {which goes along with the first theme}
or i was planning on writing something about the second theme
so far i got:
The sun started to set. While, the moon crept up behind the dark rain clouds. The grass covered in rain droplets from this morning's storm. The digital clock on the nightstand read 7:10 p.m. The cell phone that fell to the floor started blaring You're Gonna Go Far Kid by The Offspring. The girl which had been sleeping in bed a few minutes ago, scrambled up to get the phone.
not much. but its a start.
The themes sound pretty high-school level, since those are things that high-school age kids seem to have the most experience with, so depending on how old you are, they're either just right or too sophomoric.
The beginning isn't very exciting. So much setup and I have no idea who this girl is, except that she likes The Offspring. We know what an evening is like, so you don't need to set the scene so descriptively. If you want readers to keep reading, you have to start with action, not descriptions.
What would it look like to focus less on the setting description and more on action? Maybe something like:
It was 7:10 in the evening and Amy's cell phone buzzed across her messy desk, breaking the stillness with its ringtone. "With a thousand lies, and a good disguise, hit ‘em right between the eyes." Amy scrambled out of bed and picked up the phone. She tried to check the ID, because she wouldn't answer for anyone but Stacy, but the brightness of the display was too much for her sleepy eyes. Amy pulled at the heavy curtains of her window, and the bluish dusk light filled her sun-protected room. It wasn't Stacy, but it was a call she couldn't ignore...
See how action is much more exciting than descriptions about the weather? We know a lot more about this Amy than we do about your character, because there's less focus on description and more focus on action.
Lots of poets and authors have already written about the sun and the moon and rain so much that it'd be difficult to come up with something new and exciting. And besides, we can't really connect with the character through descriptions about the weather. Make her real by describing her thoughts and her actions, and don't describe things like clothes or furniture. =) best of luck!